I posted the comeback of the hiatus yesterday. Lots have read it, but none have said if it's any good. >.< I personally feel like it was an inevitable plotpoint, a slightly interesting one, but it really wasn't exciting. I'm having trouble making the transition from normal to intense. Like, you can't just suddenly treat somebody completely differently. I guess the Phantom can. But. I don't want him to come across forced; as bad writing. I just want him to slowly get her in his web, like he has intended all along, even if currently they're acting civilized. It's just hard. Hard to think about what I'd say or do in that situation. I think chapter 14 was the first step to that though. Even if Lily isn't frantic, she talks about him so damn much, listens to him, obeys him, it's obvious she's becomming obsessed, she just isn't noticing. And for him to make such a move as to forbid her of something, well, sounds like he knows he has gotten her to that point, but at the same time, not. He needs to test her a lot. She passes nearly all of them. Then neither are afraid when they realize they've ditched reality.

Yeps.........
I've got to promise myself that chapter 15 is a breakthrough.
(And I do have something planned.)